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Eclipse Bomb
Eclipse Bomb
By Rathbane
A unicorn mare, with a teal coat and short messy navy blue mane, stood on a dirt path that ran along the outskirts of Canterlot.  Her cutie mark was an eye that had an iris colored like a globe of the earth.  She was currently looking up at the full moon; a hoofstep behind her caused her to turn her head towards the source of the sound.
“Some master of observation you turned out to be.  What if I had been a guard on patrol?” A unicorn with a maroon coat and brown mane asked.  His cutie mark was of an open padlock.  Behind him were two other ponies, a unicorn with a grey coat and aqua mane, his cutie mark was an odd assortment of symbols and a Pegasus with a blue coat and purple mane, her cutie mark was a collection of gemstones and she was sporting an eye patch.
“Well, that’s not possible,” the moon gazing unicorn said, “Because the guards only patrol this stretch of road every three days.”
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Literature
Bad Therapy Part 9
Chapter IX Revelations
Twilight and the others sat around the map table in her castle enjoying their weekly pancake breakfast. She smiled as she watched Pinkie attempt to break her own record of most pancakes eaten in a minute.
“So how was your trip to Canterlot, Twi?” Applejack asked.
“It was great,” Twilight said, “We got a lot done, though I’m sorry my trip had to happen at the same time as your party at Sweet Apple Acres.”
“Party? What party?” Applejack said in confusion.
“The one you had last Thursday night,” Twilight said, “I decided to practice my night flying and flew to Canterlot.  I passed right over Sweet Apple Acres.  The barnyard was full of ponies.  I was a little high up to see who they where, but there were dozens of them.”
“Sorry, Twi, but it sounds like you were seeing things,” Applejack said, “There was no late night party at Sweet Apple Acres.  Trust m
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Literature
The Art of Trance
The Art of Trance
By Rathbane
Sweetie Belle and Applebloom looked down at the contents of the envelopes they had just opened, before looking back up at Apple Jack and Rarity.  The contents of the envelopes did little to alleviate their confusion.
“You are invited to a costume party at the home of the artist SS,” Sweetie Belle said, reading from the invitation that was inside the envelope, “Please arrive at Ms. SS’ Oceanside home at 3:00 on Nightmare Night.  Refreshments will be served and a five hundred bit prize will be awarded to the pony wearing the best costume.  Only those that have received invitations will be allowed inside.”
“Who the heck is SS?” Applebloom asked, her confusion growing.
“She’s one of the art world’s top up and coming artists,” Rarity said, “Everyone loves her work, well except for Ms. Harsh Truth, who said, ‘It is so terrible, it is corrupting the very culture of Ponyki
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Literature
For Whom the Bell Tolls Part 3
Chapter III
The Big Show
Twilight and Sunset stood in the lobby with the others after dinner.
“How you doing, Twilight?” Applejack asked, “We heard about the weird day you’ve been having.”
“Yeah, I think I’m okay now, thanks,” Twilight said, smiling at her.
“So should we head to Sonata’s show now?” Rarity asked, “It’s starting soon and we want to make sure we get good seats.”
“Of course, so we can make sure she doesn’t try anything funny,” Rainbow Dash said.
“I’d be more worried about the other two,” Sunset said, “We need to look around and make sure they’re not there.”
“Right!” the others said.
Adagio sat in the room the lodge had provided for the three of them.  She turned when she heard the door open and Aria stepped inside.
“There you are,” she said in annoyance, “Now I’ve been thinking; I couldn’t t
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Literature
Bad Therapy Part 8
Chapter VIII
The Slave Meeting
Rarity walked up the path to Sweet Apple Acres, before pausing to yawn.
Once she was done she opened her black and white spiraling eyes and thought, Though I am excited to attend Mistress’ slave meeting, I do wish she would’ve held it at a more decent hour.
She walked into the barnyard and found it to be bustling with spiral eyed ponies gathered for the slave meeting.
She looked at the throngs of ponies, before she noticed Applejack and the others.
“Hey Rarity, we were beginning to wonder if you had been hypnotized or not,” Applejack said.
“Oh darling, for a big social event like this one must be fashionably late, even if it’s in the service of, Mistress Spiral Swirl,” Rarity said.
“Man, even being hypnotized can’t break you out of being a fancy pants,” Rainbow Dash said.
Rarity was about to retort when Pinkie handed her a muffin.
“What’s this?” she asked, looking down at
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Literature
For Whom the Bell Tolls Part 2
For Whom the Bell Tolls
Chapter II An Awesome Nerd
Sunlight streamed through the window of Twilight and Sunset’s room, finally prompting the hypnotized Twilight to wake up.  She sat up and stretched.  The blue and teal spirals in her eyes faded away as she came out of her trance.
Wow, I feel great. That was one of the best night’s sleeps I’ve ever had, she thought.
“Oh hey, you’re up,” Sunset said, stepping out of the bathroom, “You were dead to the world a few minutes ago.”
“Good morning,” Twilight said, “Yeah, I was pretty out of it I guess.  I actually had trouble falling asleep last night; I guess that walk I took helped.”
“Well I’ll let you get changed, and then we can head to breakfast, “Sunset said.
“Sounds good to me, I’m starving,” Twilight said.
Sunset gave her some privacy while she changed back into her winter outfit.
These goggles are growing
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Literature
Changing Loyalties
Changing Loyalties
By Rathbane
Black Widow walked along the corridors of SHIELD headquarters and entered an office at the end of one.
“You wanted to see me?” she asked Nick Fury.
“Yes,” he said, as he got up from his desk.
 
He clicked a remote and a wall mounted screen turned on.  The screen displayed the head shot of a teenage girl with blue eyes and thick black glasses, her long black hair was tied back in a ponytail.  
“This is Kara Kaden; at fifteen she already has her masters in computer engineering and mechanical engineering.  She also has a minor in chemical engineering.  Officially her IQ is two points below Stark’s, but that’s just to preserve his ego, in reality it’s 20 points higher.  She’s developed quite a bit of tech, but only bits and pieces have found their way into the world.”
“Like what?” Black Widow asked.
“You know that ball thing in the new 'Star Wars' movie
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Literature
Bad Therapy Part 7
Bad Therapy
Chapter VII Time to Obey
Derpy and Dinky sat in their living room working on a jigsaw puzzle of kitten watching a mother duck and her ducklings pass by.   A knock on the door broke them out of their concentration.
“I’ll get it,” Derpy said, getting up, “Save the ducklings for me please, Dinky.”
“You go it mommy,” Dinky said.
Derpy walked through the house and into the Derpymail section, where the knocking was coming from.
“I wonder who it could be?” Derpy thought out loud.
When she opened the door, Dr. Spiral Swirl was standing there.
“Hi there,” Spiral Swirl said.
“Hi, can I help you?” Derpy asked.
“I was hoping you could do an important delivery for me,” Spiral Swirl said, holding up a box with her magic.
“I’m sorry, but we’re closed for the evening,” Derpy said, “If you’ll come by tomorrow I should have plenty of time to do your delivery no p
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Literature
The Magic Exam Part 4
The Magic Exam
Chapter IV Final Exam
The swirling blue vertex reappeared in another location and unceremoniously dumped Twilight and the others on the ground.  To add insult to injury, the book Golden Fleece had used popped out of the portal just as it was closing, hitting Twilight in the head.
The group groaned as they got to their feet.
“What the heck were you thinking?!” Twilight shouted in anger at Golden Fleece, “You were dealing with forces you had no control over.  You could’ve hurt or killed somepony!”
“My leg!” Ebony Darkness shouted in pain, as she clutched her front right leg, blood oozed from a gash.
“Don’t worry I’ve got you,” Healing Touch said, as she rushed over.  She levitated some gauze out of her saddle bag and wrapped the wound before she began casting her healing magic.
“Thanks! That feels nice,” Ebony Darkness said, as a shower of green sparkles appeared over her leg.
Once
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Literature
Return of the Rainbow Warrior
Return of the Rainbow Warrior
By Rathbane
Two earth ponies walked along a white sandy beach at sunset.
“I’m so glad you talked me into coming here.  This place is amazing.  The sand, the surf, these amazing flowers,” one of them said to her friend, as she pointed to a patch of various wildflowers growing out of a dune.
“I’m glad you enjoy the flowers my native land has to offer,” a voice from behind them said.
They turned to see a unicorn standing there.  She had a dark tan coat and long straight shiny black mane.  She looked at them with her brown eyes.  The unicorn was wearing a pink yukata with floral print on it as well as a lei around her neck. Also around her neck was a necklace with a small tiki idol on it that had jade gemstones in its eyes.  A single flower with purple petals that had a yellow line wrapping around them sat in her mane.
A hummingbird with metallic green feathers and a dark blue throat hovered by
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Literature
The Magic Exam Part 3
The Magic Exam
Chapter III The Test Proper
The hypnotized ponies stopped chanting their mantra and stood before Blissful Trance awaiting commands.
“This can’t be happening again.  This isn’t real, this isn’t real,” Blissful Trance whispered to herself.
“Hey, that hypno magic is actually pretty nifty,” Golden Fleece said, walking over to her.
“Huh? How come you’re not hypnotized?” Blissful Trance said in confusion.
“Just lucky I guess,” Golden Fleece said, “You even got the princess…let’s make her do stuff.”
“No! Why on earth would you want to do that?!” Blissful Trance shouted in horror, “Everypony, please wake up right now.”
Responding to her command the spirals faded from the entranced ponies’ eyes and they began to shake off the effects of the hypnosis.
“Spoil sport,” Golden Fleece said in disgust.
“Is…is everypony okay,” Tw
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The Magic Exam Part 2
The Magic Exam
Chapter II Meet and Greet
Sweetie Belle and Rarity walked through the center of Ponyville, towards Twilight’s castle.
“Now Sweetie Belle, there’s no need to worry about the test,” Rarity said, “Especially if you remember these three things: Be polite to the test giver, keep your eyes on your own paper, and if you don’t know the answer to a question on the written portion, nine times out of ten it’s: Star Swirl the Bearded.”
“Got it,” Sweetie Belle said.
They continued to walk along until Sweetie Belle noticed that Rarity had stopped dead in her tracks.
“Why’d you stop?”
“Because I don’t know how meticulously Twilight is following the ‘Test takers only beyond a certain point,’ rule.  For all I know she could’ve thrown up a magical barrier of some sort and I have no intention of walking face first into it.  So this is where we must part ways.  Good luc
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Literature
The Magic Exam
The Magic Exam
By Rathbane
Chapter I Pre-Test Jitters
Octavia stepped out of the cab, and walked around to pay the driver.
“Thank you sir,” she said, handing him some bits.
Once the cab had pulled away, she breathed a sigh of relief.
It’s good to be home, she thought, Being on tour is nice and all, but it’s wonderful to be home….wait what’s that sound?
Looking up at the sky, she saw the source of the sound, and it was getting closer.
Oh no, is it that time already?! No! No! No! I’m not ready, she thought, as she wrapped herself around her cello case to protect it.
The object grew even closer, revealing itself to be Derpy in a freefall. Once she hit the ground, she skidded along it towards Octavia, stopping just short of her.
“Hi Octavia!” Derpy said happily, “Hey, I didn’t crash!”
“Oh, hello Derpy, good job,” Octavia said, not sure how to react.
“Well, here’s your mail,&
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Bad Therapy Part 6
Chapter 6
Scooters Spirals and Spies
Bon Bon sat at an outdoor café and took a sip of her drink as she took in the quiet atmosphere of the post lunch rush.  She looked across the street and noticed Dr. Spiral Swirl eating a sandwich at another outdoor establishment.
That unicorn…I’ve seen her somewhere before, Bon Bon thought, But where?
The quiet was shattered when a voice asked, “Special Agent Sweetie Drops, have you forgotten about standing in the presence of a superior?”
The voice snapped Bon Bon out of her intense concentration and she turned to see a black unicorn with a ninja headband cutie mark and grey mane tied in a top knot staring at her with blood red eyes.
“C…Commander Shadow Dancer. It’s nice to see you again,” Bon Bon said, as she nearly chocked on her drink before standing at attention.
“I’m sorry, I didn’t mean to spook you,” Shadow Dancer said as she smiled playfully,
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Eclipse Bomb

By Rathbane


A unicorn mare, with a teal coat and short messy navy blue mane, stood on a dirt path that ran along the outskirts of Canterlot.  Her cutie mark was an eye that had an iris colored like a globe of the earth.  She was currently looking up at the full moon; a hoofstep behind her caused her to turn her head towards the source of the sound.

“Some master of observation you turned out to be.  What if I had been a guard on patrol?” A unicorn with a maroon coat and brown mane asked.  His cutie mark was of an open padlock.  Behind him were two other ponies, a unicorn with a grey coat and aqua mane, his cutie mark was an odd assortment of symbols and a Pegasus with a blue coat and purple mane, her cutie mark was a collection of gemstones and she was sporting an eye patch.

“Well, that’s not possible,” the moon gazing unicorn said, “Because the guards only patrol this stretch of road every three days.”

“Hmmm, touché,” the maroon unicorn said.

“I’m Fine Detail,” she said, “Nice to meet you.”

“I’m Locke, and this is Ruinic and Hunter,” the maroon unicorn said, before pointing to the other unicorn and Pegasus respectively.

“What were you doing staring at the moon anyways?” Hunter asked.

“Well, I’ve noticed that the Mare in the Moon seems to be getting more pronounced every year,” Fine Detail said, “It’s eerie, almost like she’s trying to get out.”

“The Mare in the Moon is just some old tale told to frighten young fillies,” Locke said, “Now enough banter, let’s get to work.”

“Thank you again so much for hiring me on to help with this test,” Fine Detail said.

“Test? Oh yeah..right,” Hunter said, his voice momentarily filled with confusion.

“I haven’t had much master observer work since little Birdsong was born, but to be asked to help the princess with your security consultation in testing the royal vaults is a real honor.”

“Like I said, enough banter.  Let’s go,” Locke said.


The quartet of ponies walked along in silence, as the path eventually took them around the rear of Canterlot Castle.  It eventually started to descend down to the cliffs below the castle.

“Wait, the patrol,” Locke said, as he motioned for the others to hide behind a large rock.

“We should be able to sneak by them in a few minutes.  Their patrols in this area cover the back half of the castle every other hour,” Fine Detail said.

“How do you know that?” Ruinic asked.

“I did my homework and observed them in advance.  This is a test after all,” Fine Detail said, smiling sheepishly.

The others rolled their eyes.

“Shouldn’t we be seeing them start to move towards the front of the castle?” Locke asked.

“Yes, maybe something’s caused them to change their routine.  Let me check,” Fine Detail said, as her horn began to glow.  She lifted a pair of binoculars out of her saddle bag and looked through them, “Hmmm I don’t see them anywhere.  They must be behind one of the towers.  I’ll check.”

The lenses on the binoculars glowed green, and suddenly the solid brick forms of the towers lining the castle walls became clear to Fine Detail.  She could see a pair of guards leaning against one of them, eating some sandwiches.

“The guards are taking an unscheduled snack break.  We’d better move fast,” Fine Detail said.

“How did you do that?” Runic asked.

“I enchanted the lenses on these to let me see through solid objects.  It helps with my master observer skill,” she said, before she and the others made a quiet, yet hasty move past the castle walls.

Once they were clear of the walls they descended even further down.  The dirt path eventually ended at a cliff face that sat below the castle.

“Huh?  It’s a dead end,” Ruinic said in annoyance.

“This is actually an old service entrance to the castle,” Locke said, “It hasn’t been used for years.”

Hunter walked over to the cliff face and brushed her hoof over it, knocking several years of dust off it, revealing the outline of a door.

“I’ve never seen a lock like that,” Fine Detail said, making note of the seven strange indentations in the doorway.

“It’s a septuplet gem lock,” Hunter said, “They used to be all the rage back in the day, until ponies realized it was more convenient to use just a simple key rather then carting around seven specific gems with them. Fortunately I came prepared.”

Fine Detail watched in amazement as Hunter reached into her saddle bag and methodically pulled out gem after gem and tried each one in one of the slots.  When one didn’t fit she tried again and again until she filled all seven slots.  When the final gem was placed the door swung open.

They then stepped inside, the unicorns illuminating the room with their horns.  Even though it was dusty and covered with cobwebs, the old service entrance was as beautifully decorated as the rest of the castle.

“So, where to now?” Ruinic asked.

Locke pulled out a crudely drawn map of the castle and looked it over, “The vault is on the floor above us.  We just go up those stairs, turn right, and then go straight.”
“Where did you get that?” Fine Detail asked.

“I bribed a guard,” Locke said.

“Looks like our test found another flaw in the castle security’s,” Fine Detail said, enjoying the excitement.

“Just use your magic binoculars to check for patrols,” Locke said.

“Oh…okay,” Fine Detail said, slightly put off by the scolding.

She climbed the stairs and stopped at the top.  She pulled out her binoculars again and activated the x-ray vision mode.  With the doors and walls now clear, she could see the guards patrolling the halls.  She observed the movements for what seemed like an eternity to the others, before she walked back down to enjoy them.

“The patrol that walks nearest the vault goes along a set route.  In a few minutes they’ll be on a route that’ll take them the farthest from the vault.  If we head upstairs now, we’ll get to it when they’re at peak distance.”

“Then let’s not dawdle,” Locke said.

The four of them made their way up the stairs and out into the castle corridors.  They walked along the quiet moonlit corridors, their hoof steps being the only thing disturbing the silence; off in the distance they could hear the hoof steps of the guards getting fainter.  Following Locke’s map, they soon found themselves in front of the large vault door.

“This thing is amazing,” Fine Detail whispered, looking it over, “It’s made of Foal Mountain Steel, and that keyhole is definitely for a custom made key, probably to prevent lock picking.”

“Yes, but they probably never planned on somepony like me,” Locke said, as his horn glowed red.  He fired a laser like beam out of his horn into the lock and after a few seconds the keyhole, deadbolt, tumblers, and other internal mechanisms melted into slag.   He then used his magic to swing the door open.

“Wasn’t that a little excessive to test out a security flaw?” Fine Detail asked.
Locke didn’t respond, as he and the others were already gathered at the entrance of the vault.

“What do you see?” Locke asked.

“A nice little crossbreed of fourth and fifth level security ruins lining the floor,” Ruinic said, “Hardly the challenge I was expecting.”

Fine Detail watched as his horn glowed, causing an array of runes to appear all across the vault floor.  One by one they faded away, almost as if they were made of chalk and an eraser was running over them.  Once they were gone Ruinic chuckled to himself.
The four of them stepped inside the vault.  Fine Detail was surprised to see the only thing within it was a couple of barrels filled with red gemstones.

“There they are,” Locke said, a smile creeping across his face, “The extra gems for the soldiers’ payroll in case things really do devolve into war with the griffins.”

“Dragon’s Blood Rubies,” Hunter said, her speech slurred slightly, as she had begun to drool.

“Alright, load them up,” Locke said.

“Whoa, whoa, whoa, isn’t this taking the test a little far?” Fine Detail said, as she watched the trio of ponies begin to fill their saddle bags with the rubies.

A sense of dread washed over her as the other ponies burst out into laughter.

“Some master observer you are,” Locke said, “When you couldn’t even tell when you were being lied to the entire time?”

“What…what do you mean?” Fine Detail said, her panic increasing by the second.
“I guess it’s time to properly introduce ourselves,” Locke said, “I’m Locke Pick, this is Ruinic the Ruiner, and that’s Gem Hunter.  Together we are the Terrible Trio.  Though now that you’re going to be joining us, I guess we’ll be the Criminal Quartet.”

“No…no I can’t join you.  I’m not a criminal.  How could I be so stupid? I shouldn’t even be near you!” Fine Detail said, as she turned to run.  She was stopped by Locke Pick shooting his magic laser out of his horn, carving a line in the vault floor in front of her.

“Sorry, membership into our group is mandatory,” Locke Pick said, as he flashed an evil grin at her.”

“Hey, I think there’s something more to this vault then we thought,” Ruinic said, as he looked over at the far wall of the vault.

“What do you mean?” Locke asked, as he kept his glowing horn aimed at Fine Detail.

“I think something’s hidden behind this wall.  Something important, though they got sloppy trying to keep it that way.  I can see a part of a level ten security ruin peaking out from the wall,” Ruinic said.

“Well then let’s just have a look-see,” Locke said, “Hunter, keep an eye on our new recruit.”

“You got it,” Hunter said, as she walked over to Fine Detail, using her wing to smack the terrified unicorn.

Locke fired his magic laser again, carving out a section of the wall that he and Ruinic then lifted out of the way.  Inside was another section of the vault.  They could make out a large object inside.

“Wow, I’m not used to dealing with level tens,” Runic said, grunting as he focused his magic on the security runes.  The ruins glowed, ready to activate, but were disabled by Runic at the last possible second.

“Whew…that was close,” he said, wiping the sweat off his forehead.

Fine Detail watched as Locke and Runic walked into the sealed off vault portion, their horns glowing.

“Hey Hunter! Get in here and bring the newbie with you!” Locke shouted a few seconds later.

“You heard the man,” Hunter said, prodding fine detail along with another wing smack to the face.

When they entered the sealed off vault their mouths dropped in astonishment.

Standing on a pedestal, cordoned off by velvet ropes, was a large dark blue sphere, a crescent moon ornamentation sat on top of it.

“What the heck is that thing?” Hunter said.

“I unno,” Runic said, “Sign says it’s an ‘Eclipse Bomb’”

“Feh, pass,” Hunter said, joining the other two beside it, “Who needs weapons.  I want treasure.”

“I wouldn’t go near that thing,” Fine Detail said, noticing several words etched into the stone walls around the Eclipse Bomb, “There are warning labels in dozens of languages.  There’s even some Changling and Ka Lio.”

“Then there’s nothing to worry about. Because we’re not going to use it,” Locke said, as he rested his hoof on it.  Instantly though, dark shadows formed under his eyes and a wicked smile formed on his face, “We’re going to sell it.”

“Sell it?” Runic asked.

“Yes.  We don’t know how to use something like this, but I know some potential clients who could. If war breaks out with the griffons we could give them this Super Weapon as an edge.”

“I dunno,” Runic said, before placing his hoof on the bomb.  Dark shadows instantly formed under his eyes, and a wicked smile spread across his face, “I think you’re thinking small scale.  Why stop at selling a weapon of war, when we can look forward to the aftermath.  So much destruction and so much abandoned and destroyed property that we can dig through to get the riches left behind.”

“What’s gotten into you guys?” Hunter said, walking over to talk some sense into them, only to inadvertently brush her wing against the bomb.  The dark shadows formed under her eyes as well, “You’ve finally decided to start speaking my language.  Let’s hear it for war with the griffons!”

“You’re…you’re all crazy.  Well crazier.  That’s war profiteering.”

“I know.  Isn’t it great?” Locke said, before firing his magic laser cutter at her hoofs, “Now help us get this thing out of here!”

Fine Detail whimpered as she used her magic to levitate the bomb in tandem with Locke and Runic.

They made their way slowly out into the halls of the castle and started working their way back to the service entrance they had come in.

“I can’t believe how stupid Celestia was, leaving only security runes around this thing,” Hunter said, “You’d think they would’ve put in some other warning sys….”

His speech was cut off by him passing out on the spot; an arrow was sticking out of his rear end.

“What the?” Locke said in anger.

“That’s far enough,” a voice from the top of a staircase said.

Two unicorns were standing on top of it. They were dressed in Royal Guard regalia.  One had summoned a scimitar constructed of magic, while the other had created a magic bow.  She was in the process of loading another arrow into it.

“Surrender now, or you all will be receiving a dose of lamia venom,” the one with the sword said.

“Fat chance!  Let’s do this!” Locke shouted as he and Hunter charged at them.

Fine Detail looked on in horror as they were quickly felled with drugged arrows the other unicorn fired off.

“Wait! No! I’m not with them! I’m not with them!” she shouted, as the unicorn focused her aim at her.

She winced in pain as the arrow struck her and then her whole world went black.




She wasn’t sure how much time had passed when she came to, but it was now daylight, and she was sitting in a small chamber.  Her legs were shackled and two royal guards were on either side of her.

The door at the end of the chamber opened and another royal guard stepped out.

“She’s ready for you,” the guard said, “Go on.”

Fine Detail gulped as she slowly shuffled into the door.  She winced as it slammed shut behind her.

“Greetings,” a voice said.

“P…Princess Celestia,” Fine Detail said in awe, as she quickly bowed before the princess.

“Please rise,” Celestia said, “Now, my guards report that you were shouting that you were not with the trio that was attempting to make off with the Eclipse Bomb.  Tell me what you meant by that.”

Fine Detail quickly relayed how she had been duped into thinking she had been recruited to help with the supposed vault security test.

“I see,” Celestia said, her voice laced with sadness, “That is quite unfortunate.  I’m terribly sorry to say, that even though you were lied to about the circumstances in which you entered the castle and Royal Vault, you are still going to be punished.”

“What!? Why?” Fine Detail said, anger and annoyance filling her voice.

“Perhaps I should explain what exactly the Eclipse Bomb is.  It is a magical weapon of mass destruction created by my sister Luna, who after being corrupted became the being known as, Nightmare Moon.  Sadly I was forced to banish her to the moon.”

“Then the Mare in the Moon is not just a legend?” Fine Detail said in amazement.

“Yes. Though Luna knew I might someday be able to overpower her, so she created magic weapons, the Nightmare Weapons, as a contingency should I do so.  I was able to round them up and lock them away before any pony could stumble upon them and use them.  They are as dangerous as ever after over 900 years, since the only one that can disarm them is Luna.  They also have a terrible enchantment on them, that whoever touches them will become instilled with a desire to use them, or find somepony that can use them to incite conflict and war.  Violence will fill their hearts.”

“That’s what happened to Locke and the others isn’t it?” Fine Detail asked.

“Yes, you were lucky and were spared the corruption.”

“But if I didn’t take it, and I wasn’t corrupted by it, why am I being punished?” Fine Detail asked, her desire for answers growing.

“It is due to a decision made in haste.  After was Luna was gone and the weapons secured, I was exhausted, saddened, and filled with a sense of betrayal.  We all were.  So the Law Council and I wrote up that whoever attempts to take or use the weapons will be met with the ultimate punishments.  In addition to locking them up, any earth pony would be stripped of their connection to the earth, any Pegasus would have their wings permanently plucked, and unicorns would have their horns broken.”

“No!  You can’t break my horn!  You can’t lock me away! I’m not a criminal!  Please!” Fine Detail pleaded, tears streamed down her face.

“I’m sorry,” Celestia said, lowering her head, “But when we forged the punishment decree, in our haste we made an addendum that should we falter in punishing those involved with Nightmare  Weapon crimes it would be a sign that the kingdom had grown weak and would fall, right then and there, struck down by massive storms and blasts of magic energy.  And even though you were duped, you are still considered part of the crime in that decree’s eyes.”

“That…that’s insane!”

“Yes.  Yes it is,” Celestia admitted, “But like I said, I fear our overwhelming exhaustion, mixed with the betrayal we all felt, led to us making overly harsh decisions that we normally wouldn’t dream of doing.”

“Please, isn’t there some sort of loophole? Some sort of way you can go easy on me.”

“I can reduce your prison sentence to just be for trespassing on forbidden royal property, but I cannot prevent the ultimate punishment from happening.  I am so sorry,” Celestia said, as a tear rolled down her cheek.

“It’s time,” a voice said.

They turned to see a trio of guards standing behind them.

“I’m sorry.  I’m just, so sorry,” Celestia said, sadness filling her voice, as the guards led Fine Detail away.

“Please no! I’m not a criminal! I’m not a criminal! I have a daughter! I have a daughter!” Fine Detail screamed at her.


A growing sense of terror and dread filled her as the guards led her down into the dungeon before leading her off to a smaller room.  Inside was a small table with a vise-like device on it.  The guards shoved her forward before placing her head on the table, locking her horn in the vice.

“Don’t move,” a guard said, as he levitated a silver sledge hammer with runes inscribed on it.  

He smashed it down on her horn, shattering it.

“Nooooo!!!!” Fine Detail screamed.

A few sparks of magic emerged from her ruined horn, before the magic faded from her, forever.

They then led her to her cell.  After the door slammed shut behind her, she collapsed on the bed, thoroughly traumatized.

I can’t believe this is happening.  This has to be a nightmare.  With a broken horn I’ll be looked upon like I’m one of the worst criminals there is.  No pony will trust me again.  I’ve let you down Birdsong.  Birch I hope you’ll raise her right, she thought, thinking of her family.

Will I ever be able to trust any pony again?  I can’t believe I was duped into this madness.  Locke, Hunter, and Runic. I hate them.  I hate them so much, She thought, before looking out her window at the moon, And I especially hate YOU!
Eclipse Bomb
Here's something a little different from me.  A heist story.  A story that I kinda alluded to in "Bow Blade and Bow" with mention of a heist being stopped by Dinky's Ancestors.


Even though it's set in the past this story had a lot of impact on the future timeline of Stories I've written.
Pluse I like the idea of Luna Having developed contingency plans in the form of evil weapons while she was nightmare moon.
I hope you enjoyed it.

I would love to hear your thoughts and opinions.
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Chapter IX Revelations


Twilight and the others sat around the map table in her castle enjoying their weekly pancake breakfast. She smiled as she watched Pinkie attempt to break her own record of most pancakes eaten in a minute.

“So how was your trip to Canterlot, Twi?” Applejack asked.

“It was great,” Twilight said, “We got a lot done, though I’m sorry my trip had to happen at the same time as your party at Sweet Apple Acres.”

“Party? What party?” Applejack said in confusion.

“The one you had last Thursday night,” Twilight said, “I decided to practice my night flying and flew to Canterlot.  I passed right over Sweet Apple Acres.  The barnyard was full of ponies.  I was a little high up to see who they where, but there were dozens of them.”

“Sorry, Twi, but it sounds like you were seeing things,” Applejack said, “There was no late night party at Sweet Apple Acres.  Trust me, if there was we would’ve woken up and given our uninvited guests a very special Apple Family greeting.”

“Yeah, if you’re not used to night flying, you might see something that’s not there,” Rainbow Dash said.

“I guess that makes sense,” Twilight said, becoming more and more unsure of herself as she nibbled on her pancake.



Later that night she was pacing back and forth in front of Spike.

“What if they’re right?” Spike said, “What if there was no party and you were just seeing things?”

“I’ve thought about that Spike,” Twilight said, “I know I saw ponies down there, the light was on in the barn.  It was one of the most well lit areas I passed over that night.”

“Didn’t Applejack say if there had been a party, she and the other Apples would’ve kicked everyone off the property?” Spike asked.

“Yes, but what if they couldn’t wake up?  What if those party goers were an unscrupulous bunch?  All it would take to let them party unnoticed is a sleep spell cast on Applejack and others.”

“You’re over thinking things, Twilight,” Spike said, trying to talk Twilight back from her paranoia.

“Well, if I’m not maybe they’ll return to the scene of the crime,” Twilight said, “If they’ve pulled off a party once, they might try it again.  They could’ve made it a weekly thing, and if they have they’ll be there again tonight.  Do you want to come with me?”

“Sorry, but I think I’d better get some sleep,” Spike said, “If you’re going to be up all night, I need to be awake enough to keep you awake tomorrow.”

“Alright then, suit yourself.” Twilight said, as she turned and left.



She approached Sweet Apple Acres as quietly as she could, lest she reveal herself to any illicit party goers too soon.

Hmmm, there’s no pony here.  But there are tons of fresh hoof prints. So there was definitely a gathering of some sort here, she thought, as she examined the barnyard, Where could they have all gone though?  Wait the light’s on in the barn.

She cautiously approached the barn and looked in.  What she saw made her gasp.  Inside was a standing room only crowd of ponies, all facing forward.  A unicorn mare was standing in front of them.

What…what in the world is going on here? Twilight thought, her confusion turning into a sense of dread, There’s Pinkie, and Rarity, And Applejack.  There’s the mayor.  Wait that pony at the front.  I’ve seen her before.  She’s the new psychologist in town.

“Hello, my hypnotized slaves,” Dr. Spiral Swirl said, “It’s so nice to see all of you here tonight.”

“Thank you, Mistress,” the enslaved ponies replied.

Mistress?! Hypnotized slaves?!! Twilight thought in horror.

“I just wanted to say, your suggestions from the last meeting were a huge success,” Spiral Swirl said happily, “In just a week, I’ve gone from having sixty five percent of Ponyville under my hypnotic spell to ninety five percent.”

Ninety five percent!? Twilight thought, her horror growing by the second, How is that possible? Almost the whole town hypnotized?  How did she manage to do something like this without anypony finding out?

“That’s why I’m happy to announce that this will be our last Slave Meeting,” Spiral Swirl said, “Unlike last time, whenever I say the meeting is over, you won’t go home and go to bed with no memory of what happened while you were in your trances, you will instead scour the town and bring any non-hypnotized pony to me.  Your friends, your family, or any random pony you find.  If they haven’t been hypnotized by me, you will bring them to me by any means necessary.  Do you understand my slaves?”

“Yes, Mistress,” the hypnotized ponies said in unison.

No!  I can’t let her do that? Twilight thought, I’m outnumbered, but if I leave to go get help, helpless ponies will be grabbed up by their friends and loved ones.  What should I do?

She mulled over her options for a few seconds, before letting out a deep breath.  She stepped into the barn.

“I’m sorry, but I can’t allow that to happen,” Twilight said in a forceful tone.

“My, my, Princess Twilight, I’m humbled you honored my little Slave Meeting with your presence.”

“Release these ponies from your control at once,” Twilight demanded.

“Hmmm, revealing yourself even though you’re outnumbered and had the element of surprise,” Spiral Swirl said, ignoring her, “You’re either very brave, or very stupid.  Let’s find out which one it is.   Get her!”

“Yes, Mistress,” the hypnotized ponies replied, as they turned and glared at Twilight.

“Uh oh,” Twilight said, before she turned and ran.

She ran across the barnyard, but was stopped in her tracks when a figured literally jumped out of the shadows, growling, and latched onto her face.

“Let go of me, Ebony Darkness,” she shouted, as she rapidly shook her head back and forth, causing Ebony Darkness to go flying.

Recovering from Ebony’s assault, she barely had time to sidestep the Cutie Mark Crusaders as they came at her at full speed on Scootaloo’s scooter.

“You missed her!  Turn back around,” Sweetie Belle called out.

“Don’t worry, I won’t let her get away,” Scootaloo said.

“Mistress Spiral Swirl will be so proud of us,” Applebloom said.

“Yeeesh,” Twilight muttered, upon hearing how far their minds had been warped. A sound caught her attention and she dived to avoid being hit by and arrow.

Derpy was hovering above her, with Dinky sticking out of her saddlebag.  Dinky had activated her magic bow and was loading up another arrow.

Since when did Dinky become such a good shot?  And what mad pony gave her real arrows? Twilight thought.  She quickly dodged another arrow, It’s dangerous on the ground, better take to the skies.

She took off and began flying away from Sweet Apple Acres, when Fluttershy stealthily flew up beside her.

“Um, Twilight, could you please turn back around and let Mistress Spiral Swirl hypnotize you? If it’s not too much trouble?” she asked quietly.

Twilight ignored her, and increased her speed.

“That’s not how you get her to stop,” Rainbow Dash said, as she flew up next to Fluttershy, “Let me show you how it’s done.”

Twilight flinched, as Rainbow Dash flew by her at a high rate of speed.  She watched as Rainbow Dash flew further and further away, only for her to swing back around.  

As a result of Rainbow Dash’s super sonic U-turn, a massive shockwave struck Twilight, knocking her out of the air.

No! No! No! Twilight thought, as she fell to ground in a crash landing.

“Owwww,” she moaned, as she got up and shook off the effects of the crash. She turned to run; only to find herself face to face with a spiral eyed Pinkie Pie.

“Hi, Twilight!” Pinkie said happily, before pulling out her party cannon.

“Pinkie, wait I….” Twilight started to protest, but Pinkie fired off the cannon sending the poor Alicorn flying.

“Bye, Twilight!” Pinkie said happily.

Her injuries becoming more and more numerous, Twilight took a little longer to shake off the effects of Pinkie’s party attack.

“What am I going to do?” she said aloud.

“You can do this the easy way, or the hard way, Twi,” Applejack said, as she emerged from behind a tree.

Twilight immediately put up a magic shield around herself.

“Hard way it is then,” Applejack said, as she ran over and began bucking the shield.

“Guys, please! I don’t want to fight you!” Twilight shouted.

Applejack’s assault on the shield eventually caused it to fail.

“We don’t want to fight you either,” Rarity said, as she came upon the scene, “Which is why I’m going to end this barbaric display as quickly as possible, by quoting you.  Look out, here comes Tom?”

“Here comes Tom?” Twilight said in confusion, before the realization hit her, “Oh no!”

She didn’t have time to react, as Rarity had used her magic to fling a large boulder at her.  Upon impact, Twilight’s world went black.



She didn’t know how long she had been out, but when her eyes opened she found herself in a nightmare.

Spiral Swirl was standing in front of her, smiling.  Behind her, stood all the other ponies she had hypnotized.

“Welcome back,” Spiral Swirl said mockingly.

“I won’t let you get away with this. I…I…I can’t move!” Twilight said in horror.

“Don’t worry; it’s just a small dose of cockatrice venom.  A small precaution until we’ve had a little therapy session, princess.”

“Why are you doing this?” Twilight asked.

“Hmmmm, you know what, you’re the first pony to ask me that,” Spiral Swirl said, slightly surprised, “It’s usually, ‘I won’t let you do this,’ or ‘Please don’t hypnotize me.’ That is, if I give them a chance to.”

Twilight glared at her, angry over her mockery of her victims.

“Alright, since you’re the first, I’ll be happy to answer you,” Spiral Swirl said, as she began pacing back and forth in front of Twilight, “You’re a well read pony.  Let’s see how well you know your lesser known Canterlot crimes.  Have you ever heard of an attempted theft of something called an Eclipse Bomb?”

“Yes, I read about that.  Four criminals attempted to steal a magic super weapon created by Nightmare Moon.  They were all caught and punished.  That was over fifty years ago, what has that got anything to do with you?”

“Well first of all, your sources are wrong.  Very wrong,” Spiral Swirl said, anger building in her voice, “It wasn’t four criminals.  It was three, and one innocent unicorn that had been duped into helping the others under the assumption she was helping test the security of the royal vault.”

“So you mean an innocent unicorn had to have her horn shattered?” Twilight said, shuddering despite the paralysis.

“Yes, that was my grandmother, Fine Detail.  Now tell me, did your source tell you what happened to the ponies involved with the crime after they were punished, especially the innocent ones?”

“No…it didn’t,” Twilight said, not liking where things were going.

“Then allow me to enlighten you,” Spiral Swirl said, her anger growing, “After spending four years of her ‘lenient sentence’ in the Canterlot dungeons, my grandmother returned home.  Only instead of finding her husband happy to see her return to him, she found him with another mare.  They wanted nothing to do with a unicorn that would be looked upon as the worst criminal element with her broken horn, so they handed my mother off to her and kicked her to curb.”

“Oh Mistress, that’s so sad,” Pinkie said, tearing up.

“Don’t interrupt,” Spiral Swirl commanded.

“Yes, Mistress. I’m sorry, Mistress,” Pinkie said, kneeling before her.

“Now then, where was I? Oh yes, with no place to call home and a four year old filly to watch over, my grandmother began her long journey to her sister’s home in Las Pegasus.  Because of her broken horn, no carriage or train would take her on as a passenger and inns charged her exorbitant amounts of money.  The small stipend she had received from Celestia upon her release as ‘compensation’ quickly ran out.  Now bitless, she depended on the kindness of strangers to help her get by.  It was easier in big cities, as they were more sympathetic to her plight.  However she couldn’t stay long, since sympathy only went so far, before fear of being associated with a ‘broken horn’ outweighed it.  So she and my mom moved further and further along, until they came to a small town call: Ponyville.”

Twilight gulped.

“She found no sympathy there,” Spiral Swirl said, practically hissing with each word, “They were all too concerned about maintaining their perfect ‘nice small town’ identity.  There was no place for a ‘criminal element’ there.  On top of that, the Pegai in charge of Ponyville’s weather decided to beat out Canterlot for coldest winter that year.  So my mother and grandmother were forced to walk through the area with nopony offering them shelter in that extreme cold.  That was the end of their journey.  That cold killed my grandmother.”

Spiral Swirl paused momentarily to breath heavily, trying to rein in her anger some.  Twilight remained stunned, while a few of the hypnotized ponies began crying over their Mistress’ family’s plight.

“Of course once the so called ‘criminal’ unicorn was gone, ponies were more then happy to offer up shelter to my mother, but by that time the cold had given her some bad frostbite, and she lost her leg.  Despite her hardships though, she went on to become a celebrated ornithologist, met a nice stallion and had two fillies.  One of whom, went on to go to school and get a degree in psychology to help supplement the hypno magic she had developed.  That filly then went on to start her own practice, before she moved it to little old ‘nice small town’ Ponyville.  Now you know the rest of the story.”

“I’m sorry about what all your mother and grandmother had to go through,” Twilight said, hoping she could now try and talk some sense into Spiral Swirl, “But that was almost fifty years ago.  A lot of ponies that lived in Ponyville back then are no longer living here or…uh living.  Why take out your revenge on the ones living here today?”

“Oh it’s not just the ponies, it’s the town.  It’s that small town mentality that I’m worried about.  Sure they say things have changed over the years, but they haven’t.   I know deep down they’d still reject a unicorn with a broken horn in a second.  That’s why even the ponies that live here now must pay.  By turning every pony in Ponyville into my hypnotized slave, I’ll create a heaven where no member of my family will be denied anything by them ever again, and as far as the rest of the world goes, the hypnotized citizens of Ponyville will serve as the most extreme reminder ever, to never judge a book by its cover.”

“You’re insane,” Twilight said, realizing that there would be no reasoning with Spiral Swirl.

“No I’m not,” Spiral Swirl said in offended tone.

“Then you’re a sociopath.”

“I’m not that either, but points for having a good backup insult.”

“I won’t let you get away with this, and neither will the princesses.”

“Oh, I think they will,” Spiral Swirl said, as she flashed a wicked grin, “Especially once I utter Princess Luna’s hypnotic trigger.  The war she’ll have with Celestia will make their fight when she was Nightmare Moon look like child’s play.”

“You’ve hypnotized Luna?” Twilight said in shock.

“Of course, you didn’t think I’d forget one of the root causes of my grandmother’s misery?  It was quite simple; all I had to do was dream about having a therapy session with Princess Luna, every night.  Once she dream walked into that dream her curiosity got the better of her and she played along.  Let’s just say having a hypnotherapy session with her was very cathartic,” Spiral Swirl said, chuckling slightly.

I can’t believe this is happening!  The fact that she has my friends and almost all of Ponyville under her control is bad enough, but Luna’s been enslaved by her too! Twilight thought, her despair growing.

“And even if I didn’t have Luna under my control, the Princesses wouldn’t be able to stop me, especially since I’d have all of the Elements of Harmony acting as my hypnotized protectors.  Speaking of which, I think it’s high time we began our therapy session, Princess Twilight,” Spiral Swirl said, as she directed her magic at her saddle bag.  She levitated her pocket watch out of it and let it dangle in front of Twilight’s eyes, “Now just relax and watch the watch.”

“No,” Twilight whispered.

“Just relax and watch the watch.  Watch it swing back and forth. Back and forth.  Let your eyes follow the movement of the shiny gold pocket watch,” Spiral Swirl said, as she began her induction.

No, I won’t let her hypnotize me, Twilight thought, as her eyes locked on the watch, I’m exausted and  used up so much magic trying to get away from my friends.  I just need a little more time.

“Watch the watch.  Relax.  Relax. Relax, and listen to my voice.  Let my voice calm you.  You’ve had a stressful day, Princess Twilight.  Let that stress melt away, as my voice and the swinging watch relaxes you.”

Her voice is pretty relaxing to listen to.  No!  And her watch.  It’s so pretty.

“You’re doing very well, focusing only on the watch and listening to my voice.  Your eyes are glued to the watch, as you relax more and more for me.  So relaxed.  Your legs are relaxing.  Your stomach and chest are relaxing.”

She’s right.  This is so wrong, but it feels so good, Twilight thought, as waves of relaxation spread through her.

“Now your wings are nice and relaxed.  Now your neck and head are relaxed.  Your whole body is the picture of relaxation.  All your muscles are relaxed.  All your stresses and tensions are fading away.”

Yessss…they are…it’s so nice to let go of all the stress of finding out my friends were made into her hypnotized slaves and fighting with them,  Twilight thought, as a blissful smile formed on her face.

“That’s right, you’re enjoying our hypnosis session, Twilight.  You love this feeling of relaxation.  You love watching my watch.  You’re so relaxed now.  You’re starting to feel sleepy.  And the constant swinging motion of my watch is making your eyes feel heavy.”

She’s right…I do feel sleepy, Twilight thought, fighting the urge to yawn.

“I’m going to count from five to zero.  At zero your heavy eyes will lock shut and you will fall into a deep hypnotized sleep for me.  Five…you’re doing so very well. Four…you’ve been a good patient, following all my instructions.”

I…I feel it… I’m so sleepy…can’t fight much…longer.

“Three…your eyelids feel like they’re made of lead.

Yes…they’re so heavy, Twilight thought, as her eyes started to droop.

“Two…so ready to be hypnotized.”

I…Can’t believe it.  I’ve let everyone down.  My friends.  The princesses.  I’m not ready…but I feel like I don’t have much of a choice.

“One…Feel the hypnosis start to wash over you.”

No! No! No! No! No! NO!! Twilight thought, as the fog of hypnosis started to consume her mind.

“Zer….”

“No! NO! NO! NO! NO!” Twilight shouted, as her thoughts manifested themselves into screams.

Her outburst caused Spiral Swirl to halt the induction. As she stepped back in shock, the pocket watch clattered to the ground due to her lapse in concentration.

Twilight stood there breathing heavily, as she regained her bearings for a split second.  Her horn then glowed and she vanished in a flash.

Spiral Swirl stared at the spot Twilight had stood at, before she turned to face her hypnotized slaves.

“Why didn’t anypony tell me she could teleport?!!” she demanded.

The enslaved ponies backed away slightly at their Mistress’ anger.

“Well, we kinda thought you knew, Mistress,” Pinkie Pie said, “It’s kinda her thing.”

Spiral Swirl face hoofed.

“Alright, listen up,” she commanded, “She probably didn’t go far.  She probably didn’t want to abandon the town after knowing what I have planned for it.  She also is probably paranoid about my story of triggering Luna, so she most likely didn’t go to Canterlot.  That being said, your orders are as follows.  One, go into Ponyville and bring me back any pony that isn’t hypnotize.  Two, while hunting for non-hypnotized ponies, Princess Twilight is your primary target.  Three, I want a few of you to stay here in case she comes back.  Do you understand?”

“Yes, Mistress.  I hear and I obey,” the hypnotized ponies said in unison.

“Good.  Now go!”

She watched as a few ponies took their positions guarding the barn, while the others marched towards Ponyville.

This is but a minor setback.  All of Ponyville will be under my hypnotic control tonight, she thought.
Bad Therapy Part 9
Well here we are.   The darkest hour.  Twilight's escaped for now, but Ponyville is in even more danger then before.

I hope you guys liked finally learning Spiral Swirl's motivations.  Sure it's revenge but it's probably the craziest form of revenge by proxy ever.  This and my story Eclispse Bomb were going to be tied in together from the very start. 

We're now into the final quarter of Bad Therapy.  I  hope you enjoyed this chapter.  The origins.  The fight sequence.  The almost hypnotized Twilight. 

As always let me know your thoughts and opinions.
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I don't usually do stuff like this but sure why not.


tagged by :icontigerssunshyn:



1. Real Name: I prefer the anonymity the internet offers plus my screen name is cooler sounding then my real name XD 


2. Nickname: See above XD

3. Favorite Color: Blue...no teal...no purple.  uh Blurpleal

4. Male or Female?: male

5. Elementary/Primary School: Yes

6. Middle/Secondary School: yes

7. High school/College: yes

8. University: yes

9. Hair Color: brown

10. Tall or Short?: tall

11. Sweats or Jeans?: Khakis

12. Phone or Camera?: Phone

13. Health or Freak? uhhhh Health maybe

14. Orange or Apple: orange

15. Fucked off Elsewhere: Once almost.

16. Guy Friends or Girl Friends?: both

17. Piercings?: nope


18. Pepsi or Coke?: Rootbeer

19. Have you been on an Airplane?: Yes 

20. Have you been in a relationship?: yes

21. Have you been in a car accident? yes

22. Have you been in a fist fight?: no

23. First piercing?: N/A

24. Best Friend(s)?: my friendo out in Arizona

25. First Award: T-ball trophy

26. First Crush: Long long long time ago.....so long can't remember her name lol

27. First Word: mama

28. Any talents? uh writing. remembering useless trivia

29. Last person you talked to?: mom

30. Last person you texted?: my friend

31. Last person you watched a movie with?: mom and dad

32. Last thing you ate?: chicken

33. Last movie/TV show you watched?: Face Off the reality show not the Nick Cage movie

34. Last song you listened to?: Riding a black unicorn down the side of an erupting volcano while drinking from a chalice filled with the laughter of small children by Voltaire.

35. Last thing you bought?: gas, beef jerky, and a lotto ticket

36. Last person you hugged?: my mom

Favorites:

37. Food: Baked chicken and mashed potatoes

38. Drink: Lemonade

39. Bottoms: Khakis

40. Flower: Snapdragons

41. Animal: Cat

42. Music: rock

43. Movie: Airplane!

Have you ever...

45. Fallen in Love with someone?: Yes

46. Celebrated Halloween?: Yes

47. Had your heart broken?: Yes

48. Went over the minutes/texts on your phone?: no

49. Had someone like you?: Yes

50. Hated the way someone changed?: definitely 

51. Got pg?: ???

52. Had an abortion?: N/A

53. Did something you regret?: Yes many times

54. Broken a promise?: Yes

55. Hid a secret?: Yes

56. Pretend to be happy?: yes

57. Met someone who has changed your life?: Yes

58. Pretended to be sick?: Yes 

59. Left the country?: Yes 

60. Tried something you normally wouldn't like and liked it?: Yes

61. Cried over the silliest thing?: Yes

62. Ran a mile?: Yes.....took me 13 minutes and I walked most of it but i "ran" it

63. Gone to the beach with your best friends?: no

64. Gotten into an argument with your friends?: yes

65. Disliked someone?: Yes.

66. Stayed single for two years since the first time you had a bf/gf?: yes


Currently:

67. Eating: String cheese

68. Drinking: Water

69. Listening to: TV

70. Sitting or laying?: sitting

71. Plans for today?: Work and laundry

72. Waiting for: An app to update

73. Want kids?: maybe someday

74. Want to get married?: maybe someday

75. Want to travel?: I want to go to Easter Island

What do you look for in a partner?

76. Lips or eyes?: eyes

77. Shorter or taller?: everyone is taller than me

78. Younger or older?: doesn't matter

79. Romantic or spontaneous?: Uhhhhh 

80. Sensitive or loud?: Uhhhhh

81. Hook-up or relationship?: Relationship


82. Looks or personality?: Personality 


Have you ever...

83. Lost glasses?: no

84. Snuck out of the house?: Yes

85. Held a gun/knife in self defense?: no

86. Killed somebody?: I unno.  I could have crazy latent Steven King style mind powers and not know it yet.

87. Broke someones heart?: Maybe?

88. Been in love?: Yes

89. Cried when someone dies?: Yes


Do you believe in... 

90. Yourself?: Yes

91. Miracles?: Yes

92. Love at first sight?: Never happened to me so no

93. Heaven?: yes

94. Santa Claus?: No

95. Aliens? Yes

96. Ghosts/Angels?: Both


Truthfully 

97. Is there one person you really wanna be with right now?: Not just one, but several 

98. Do you know who your real friends are?: yeah

99. Do you believe in God?: Yes

100. Post as 100 Truths and tag 5 people

Sorry if you didn't want to be tagged. Your not obligated to do this.
I tag

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:iconanimated--freak:
:iconchocofoxforever:
:iconimzebrony:
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Looks Like Dr. Spiral Swirl was the top pic for the Pony Hypnotist you'd like to be hypnotized by. Now as a follow up...why would you want to be hypnotized by her?
42%
25 deviants said For therapy, followed by becoming her hypnotized slave
22%
13 deviants said To become her hypnotized slave
20%
12 deviants said Just to experience what hypnosis is like
10%
6 deviants said For therapy
7%
4 deviants said Other (if chosen please explain in the comments, thanks)
Of all my Human Hypnotist Characters I've created, which one would you prefer to fall under the hypnotic spell of
26%
15 deviants said Stage Hypnotist Sunset
19%
11 deviants said Hannah the Hypnotist
18%
10 deviants said Dr. Kara Jones (virtual hypnotist extraordinaire)
16%
9 deviants said Fanta
9%
5 deviants said Stage Hypnotist Sonata
7%
4 deviants said The Amazing Brittni (pre-teen stage hypnotic trick or treater)
5%
3 deviants said Kara Kaden (and her mind control headbands)
I don't usually do stuff like this but sure why not.


tagged by :icontigerssunshyn:



1. Real Name: I prefer the anonymity the internet offers plus my screen name is cooler sounding then my real name XD 


2. Nickname: See above XD

3. Favorite Color: Blue...no teal...no purple.  uh Blurpleal

4. Male or Female?: male

5. Elementary/Primary School: Yes

6. Middle/Secondary School: yes

7. High school/College: yes

8. University: yes

9. Hair Color: brown

10. Tall or Short?: tall

11. Sweats or Jeans?: Khakis

12. Phone or Camera?: Phone

13. Health or Freak? uhhhh Health maybe

14. Orange or Apple: orange

15. Fucked off Elsewhere: Once almost.

16. Guy Friends or Girl Friends?: both

17. Piercings?: nope


18. Pepsi or Coke?: Rootbeer

19. Have you been on an Airplane?: Yes 

20. Have you been in a relationship?: yes

21. Have you been in a car accident? yes

22. Have you been in a fist fight?: no

23. First piercing?: N/A

24. Best Friend(s)?: my friendo out in Arizona

25. First Award: T-ball trophy

26. First Crush: Long long long time ago.....so long can't remember her name lol

27. First Word: mama

28. Any talents? uh writing. remembering useless trivia

29. Last person you talked to?: mom

30. Last person you texted?: my friend

31. Last person you watched a movie with?: mom and dad

32. Last thing you ate?: chicken

33. Last movie/TV show you watched?: Face Off the reality show not the Nick Cage movie

34. Last song you listened to?: Riding a black unicorn down the side of an erupting volcano while drinking from a chalice filled with the laughter of small children by Voltaire.

35. Last thing you bought?: gas, beef jerky, and a lotto ticket

36. Last person you hugged?: my mom

Favorites:

37. Food: Baked chicken and mashed potatoes

38. Drink: Lemonade

39. Bottoms: Khakis

40. Flower: Snapdragons

41. Animal: Cat

42. Music: rock

43. Movie: Airplane!

Have you ever...

45. Fallen in Love with someone?: Yes

46. Celebrated Halloween?: Yes

47. Had your heart broken?: Yes

48. Went over the minutes/texts on your phone?: no

49. Had someone like you?: Yes

50. Hated the way someone changed?: definitely 

51. Got pg?: ???

52. Had an abortion?: N/A

53. Did something you regret?: Yes many times

54. Broken a promise?: Yes

55. Hid a secret?: Yes

56. Pretend to be happy?: yes

57. Met someone who has changed your life?: Yes

58. Pretended to be sick?: Yes 

59. Left the country?: Yes 

60. Tried something you normally wouldn't like and liked it?: Yes

61. Cried over the silliest thing?: Yes

62. Ran a mile?: Yes.....took me 13 minutes and I walked most of it but i "ran" it

63. Gone to the beach with your best friends?: no

64. Gotten into an argument with your friends?: yes

65. Disliked someone?: Yes.

66. Stayed single for two years since the first time you had a bf/gf?: yes


Currently:

67. Eating: String cheese

68. Drinking: Water

69. Listening to: TV

70. Sitting or laying?: sitting

71. Plans for today?: Work and laundry

72. Waiting for: An app to update

73. Want kids?: maybe someday

74. Want to get married?: maybe someday

75. Want to travel?: I want to go to Easter Island

What do you look for in a partner?

76. Lips or eyes?: eyes

77. Shorter or taller?: everyone is taller than me

78. Younger or older?: doesn't matter

79. Romantic or spontaneous?: Uhhhhh 

80. Sensitive or loud?: Uhhhhh

81. Hook-up or relationship?: Relationship


82. Looks or personality?: Personality 


Have you ever...

83. Lost glasses?: no

84. Snuck out of the house?: Yes

85. Held a gun/knife in self defense?: no

86. Killed somebody?: I unno.  I could have crazy latent Steven King style mind powers and not know it yet.

87. Broke someones heart?: Maybe?

88. Been in love?: Yes

89. Cried when someone dies?: Yes


Do you believe in... 

90. Yourself?: Yes

91. Miracles?: Yes

92. Love at first sight?: Never happened to me so no

93. Heaven?: yes

94. Santa Claus?: No

95. Aliens? Yes

96. Ghosts/Angels?: Both


Truthfully 

97. Is there one person you really wanna be with right now?: Not just one, but several 

98. Do you know who your real friends are?: yeah

99. Do you believe in God?: Yes

100. Post as 100 Truths and tag 5 people

Sorry if you didn't want to be tagged. Your not obligated to do this.
I tag

:iconangelsserenity:
:iconanimated--freak:
:iconchocofoxforever:
:iconimzebrony:
:iconseraphimstardust:

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EpicCartoonsFan Featured By Owner May 15, 2017  Student Artist
Hey, umm... You there, bro? Do you still wanna talk to me?
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pikatwig Featured By Owner May 2, 2017
Hi
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ImperfectXIII Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you for the birthday points! ^^
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Rathbane Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2017
You're very welcome:
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FantasLily32 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much for the watch ^^
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Kaik-4The-WolfChi Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you for the points! 
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Rathbane Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2017
You're very welcome:)
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Miss-Jazzmatazz Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconthanku4watch1::iconthanku4watch2::iconthanku4watch3: :D
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PurpleDraws1987 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2017  Hobbyist Filmographer
Hello. I don't want to bother you or promote my art.. I'm just sending this to people I know love hypnosis stuff. Sometimes hypno-artists don't do requests or commission prizes are too high. So I was thinking maybe I should start making drawings on hypnosis. (But no very dirty stuff. I have limits 😅) So if you're interested in it and want me to draw something for you please comment on my latest status update. Thank you for your time X3
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AngelOfStrenght Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2017
Thank you for the points for the commission :)
apriciat it :D
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